Find a way to incorporate their pieces into the design. To me, this does not grab my attention, but adding their photography would. Also work on your hierarchy. To me there are only two levels. One being your 4x9, than the second level is everything else. Figure out what is more important, highlight that. It has come a long way from "postcard" feeling. Hope this is helpful
before and after your pullout you should have an ellipsis… ie: those 3 in a row dots, rather than just 2… assuming you're implying that words have come before and after your quote that you're editing out…
I agree with Jo that you're missing hierarchy… in your bottom half… within your 5W's (when, where, etc) reads as a block whereas you're trying to give people direction. The names still feel a bit big.
And really am missing those images. That's what this is about. This isn't a "message" poster that requires type, it's not a "concert" poster that just needs info on where and when to show up… this really is about people's work… not the people. Still feels about the people, and you're missing a great opportunity to work with images not your own to really help you learn how to showcase work for when it comes to your own stuff.
Your poster should be about their photography, and in turn their photography will then be about their subject matter. The level of abstraction there is awesome… allowing you to show someone their own work from a purely aesthetic view… to entice those unfamiliar to come see more…
As a purely typographic poster, it's coming along though. Depending on what it looks like big, I'd be a bit concerned the top of the 9, the top of the 4, and the y in photography feel close to the edge. But they may not be… it might be fine bigger.
Find a way to incorporate their pieces into the design. To me, this does not grab my attention, but adding their photography would. Also work on your hierarchy. To me there are only two levels. One being your 4x9, than the second level is everything else. Figure out what is more important, highlight that. It has come a long way from "postcard" feeling. Hope this is helpful
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ReplyDeletebefore and after your pullout you should have an ellipsis… ie: those 3 in a row dots, rather than just 2… assuming you're implying that words have come before and after your quote that you're editing out…
ReplyDeleteI agree with Jo that you're missing hierarchy… in your bottom half… within your 5W's (when, where, etc) reads as a block whereas you're trying to give people direction. The names still feel a bit big.
And really am missing those images. That's what this is about. This isn't a "message" poster that requires type, it's not a "concert" poster that just needs info on where and when to show up… this really is about people's work… not the people. Still feels about the people, and you're missing a great opportunity to work with images not your own to really help you learn how to showcase work for when it comes to your own stuff.
Your poster should be about their photography, and in turn their photography will then be about their subject matter. The level of abstraction there is awesome… allowing you to show someone their own work from a purely aesthetic view… to entice those unfamiliar to come see more…
As a purely typographic poster, it's coming along though. Depending on what it looks like big, I'd be a bit concerned the top of the 9, the top of the 4, and the y in photography feel close to the edge. But they may not be… it might be fine bigger.